Sunday 9 September 2012

The first few paragraphs of chapter one for the fanfiction I'm writing. I know it doesn't really have much a a plot yet but I wanted people's advice on whether you think I should continue with it. I know where I'm going with it and would appreciate any comments/constructive critisism. I hope to make it a sort of series as well if it's any good! Thank you if you do read it, I appreciate that it still needs a LOT of work but hopefully you enjoy it ;D


A loud and abrupt rap on the door disturbed the silence that captivated 221B. John was the first to wake, blinking helplessly like a new born child as he was snatched from his dream and pulled into reality. His back clicked into place after an awkward sleeping position had left it almost crippled. He stumbled across the room to the window and tore the curtains open, unintentionally disturbing the hangover he was experiencing from the previous night.

A second knock, this time sounding louder.

John threw a hand to his aching head, each pound on the door was worth ten to his recovering drunken mind. Sunlight was now pouring into the bedroom from the window, filling the room with a brilliant glow, revealing all the little dust particles that would normally have gone unnoticed. Outside, the sky was untouched by clouds, bright and blue like the eyes that now peered in through the letter box of their flat.

‘Hello?’

John could just about make out the voices coming from downstairs. God, why couldn’t Sherlock get up and see to them? Didn’t he know that John had been out all night with Sarah?

‘Hello? Anyone ther-‘ 

‘Zoe, behave!’

‘No one’s in. We might as well leave.’

A new voice suddenly integrated with the previous two.

‘Ah, gentlemen! And young Zoe too. Please, come in.’

John stopped. Was that – it couldn’t be – Sherlock was actually up?! He staggered over to the door to get a better listen. The voices had stopped in the hall. Everything had gone quiet.  Why weren’t they coming up? Unless – oh, they must have gone into Mrs Hudson’s for a bit. Perfect. Just enough time to give him a chance to get dressed. He sorted through the pile of clothes lying next to the bed; the shirt from last night, a pair of jeans from two weeks ago - at this stage, anything would do. He threw on a pair of trousers and the jumper he’d bought last week and ran a comb quickly through his hair. Finally he managed to open the door and make his way downstairs; stopping quickly in the kitchen to tend to his headache and dry throat.
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